Sunday, February 13, 2011

Two's company and threes a crowd...


Happy Valentine's Day everybody! It's time again for Microfiction Monday #70 where Susan, over at Stony River, challenges us to write a story in 140 characters or less (including punctuation and spaces) based on a picture she posts. Susan was right-on with this week's picture because of its "love" theme. For some reason, I didn't have much trouble doing verse or prose, and I'm attributing this to the anticipation and excitement that goes along with this holiday. Now I know I said that I could live without Valentine's Day, but my kid’s excitement is rubbing off on me, and my husband is acting very strangely… Anyway, here is this week's picture and my first story:


Cedric kept his eyes on the countryside, trying hard to ignore his friends-if he had known it was a lover’s picnic he never would have come. (140 characters)

And here is my poem:

As I sit beneath this tree,
A thought doth occur to me,
Wherever I go,
Or aspire to be,
I am but a tiny speck,
In a world of uncertainty. (140 characters)

Hmm...the poem maybe a little on the depressing side, but I kept thinking that if I was that fifth person, I wouldn't be the happiest of people. I look forward to reading all of your entries, especially since I know a lot of you may address the fact that some of the boys look a bit like girls-I'm hoping for some good laughs! Take care!
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32 comments:

  1. Sylvia KFebruary 13, 2011 at 9:34 PM

    Great takes on the pic of the day, Susan, mine had him feeling pretty much the same way! Hope you have a good weekend!

    Sylvia

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  2. soniaFebruary 13, 2011 at 10:11 PM

    Great take on the pic!

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  3. Melanie ShermanFebruary 13, 2011 at 10:15 PM

    Oh the poor man. How uncomfortable for him. Maybe if he reached over and grabbed on of those bottles?

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  4. SouthLakesMomFebruary 13, 2011 at 10:29 PM

    They really ought to make those invitations more clear...

    nicely done, Susan

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  5. KarenFebruary 13, 2011 at 10:44 PM

    Reading the lonely fella, under the tree and all his loneliness. Maybe he should roll with Melanie's idea and at least enjoy the wine! :>

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  6. PeggyFebruary 13, 2011 at 11:29 PM

    Feeling like the 5th wheel does not make for a fun time.
    I always look forward to coming over and reading your poems. Another good one tonight!

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  7. DeborahFebruary 13, 2011 at 11:33 PM

    Both are excellent!

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  8. gaelikaaFebruary 14, 2011 at 2:37 AM

    Both are great. There's nothing worse than feeling like a gooseberry, is there?

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  9. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 3:07 AM

    Great poem. I was trying to figure out how to address the obvious femininity of those characters but just couldn't get it to fit... so I went in a different direction.

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  10. indicaspeciesFebruary 14, 2011 at 4:37 AM

    And I thought they were all girls except one, but you changed their gender! haha...
    Good ones here.
    I too have done a bit of prose and poetry. Have a lovely day.

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  11. Rek SeshFebruary 14, 2011 at 5:51 AM

    sympathies mine
    Dear ole chappie
    sympathy truly heartfelt
    listen to what
    Susan doth say
    the river bank beckons
    a fair maiden the other way..

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  12. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 5:56 AM

    Loved the poem. Beautiful!
    I feel so sorry for the poor man and terrible that I didn't mention him in my microfiction. LOL! :O)

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  13. izzyFebruary 14, 2011 at 7:49 AM

    I so agree! always had a hard time with parties...thanks

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  14. DianneFebruary 14, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    I really enjoy your poems each week
    you're a really good poet :)

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  15. DianeFebruary 14, 2011 at 9:32 AM

    Love your poem. So true what we really are! :O)

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  16. Liz MaysFebruary 14, 2011 at 1:40 PM

    You made me feel so sorry for Cedric! LOL

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  17. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2011 at 5:33 PM

    Loved both your entries. In the future Cedric may want to confirm the details before he agrees to another outing.

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  18. Lisa Ricard ClaroFebruary 14, 2011 at 8:17 PM

    Love them both! The first is sad...I feel sorry for the poor guy. The second is wonderful, too -- an important statement packed into so few words. Very well done.

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  19. Elizabeth MuellerFebruary 14, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    Oh, I love this MM! I've felt that many times in my life... :)

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  20. Doctor FTSEFebruary 15, 2011 at 2:41 AM

    Isn't he just waiting his turn?

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  21. anthonynorthFebruary 15, 2011 at 2:46 AM

    Nicely done on both counts.

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  22. jabblogFebruary 15, 2011 at 6:40 AM

    Poor Cedric! People always promise not to ignore the person without the partner . . .

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  23. AkelamaluFebruary 15, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    We were on the same wavelength with this one Lisa. :)

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  24. AkelamaluFebruary 15, 2011 at 10:44 AM

    Ooops sorry Susan I didn't mean to type Lisa. :0

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  25. PoochFebruary 15, 2011 at 11:49 AM

    Poor Cedric, ever the lone man!
    :)

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  26. VickiFebruary 15, 2011 at 12:17 PM

    Well done o both accounts!

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  27. Grandma's GoulashFebruary 15, 2011 at 1:29 PM

    Your poem says it so well. Nice one.

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  28. Michael G-GFebruary 15, 2011 at 7:19 PM

    Wow to both. Your poem is especially good this week.

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  29. CadFebruary 16, 2011 at 6:48 AM

    Five into four certainly won't go!

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  30. JimFebruary 16, 2011 at 6:50 AM

    Poor fellow. I wonder why he just doesn't leave? Perhaps they haven't had their basket lunch yet?

    Your poem is very nice. I do sometimes go back and change the mood of my writing. A lot of the time, though, I find it mirrors the way I'm feeling at the time.
    ..

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  31. Elizabeth MuellerFebruary 16, 2011 at 1:20 PM

    Susan, I have an award for you!

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  32. MargaretFebruary 16, 2011 at 10:57 PM

    ... and Cedric looks like the cute one to me!

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