Sunday, January 16, 2011

A little sword play for #66

It's a war out there-literally in Microfiction Monday #66! For those of you who are new, Susan, over at Stony River, challenges us to write a story (140 characters of less including spacing and punctuation) based on a picture she posts each week. I worked on both the prose and poetry while at my daughter's gymnastic meet tonight. I did it in between events, and yes, this time I was able to get a poem out (although it's pretty darn short.) Anyway, here is the picture and my first story:


Fudo grabbed the first thing he could reach, hoping it would buy him some time, but Rafu'a sword would test this tactic in mere seconds. (136 characters)

And here is my poem:

The war raged on,
Pitting father against son.
But in the end,
Nobody really won. (80 characters)
It's a little rough around the edges, but no time for rewrites...
Now, a few of you (I hope) will exercise your funny bone tonight, so I can't wait!
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30 comments:

  1. Fay CampbellJanuary 16, 2011 at 10:43 PM

    His parasol isn't much of a golden parachute, eh? funny

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  2. PeggyJanuary 16, 2011 at 10:49 PM

    I liked both, no rough edges that I saw.
    You're just good! I so enjoy coming by every week.

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  3. Sylvia KJanuary 16, 2011 at 11:09 PM

    Oh, I agree with Peggy, no rough edges at all and you are good indeed! I appreciate your visits very much, thank you. Hope you've had a good weekend, Susan, and a great week to follow!

    Sylvia

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  4. Maria@BubblegumandDuctTapeJanuary 17, 2011 at 12:22 AM

    nice poem, I couldn't think of anything for a poem today but yours came out really nice.

    Poor Fudo, not sure the parasol can help him much. May he rest in peaces.

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  5. KarenJanuary 17, 2011 at 2:38 AM

    Enjoyed both! But, now I see a saga full of deeply entrenched family turmoil...oh, the drama...sigh... :> Hope your week's off to a great start! :>

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  6. anthonynorthJanuary 17, 2011 at 4:00 AM

    Nicely done, both.

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  7. Lisa Ricard ClaroJanuary 17, 2011 at 7:01 AM

    Great job, as always, and written on the go! Enjoyed them both. :)

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  8. DianneJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:16 AM

    poor Fudo, who would think a parasol would be the first thing available!

    your poem is lovely

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  9. yoncaJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:43 AM

    They both are good.Wish you a great week, Susan.

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  10. izzyJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    I am so glad nobody REALLY won- could have been messy! thanks-

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  11. DianeJanuary 17, 2011 at 9:20 AM

    I think your poem said it all.... so sad. :O(

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  12. PatJanuary 17, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    Maybe with some quick thinking and soothing words Fudo will calm his attacker. Plus his pretty pink parasol might shock Rafu into momentary paralysis.

    I really like your poem--so poignant, and sadly true sometimes.

    I really like your prose and poem MMs!

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  13. Ms. GJanuary 17, 2011 at 10:08 AM

    I like them both but the poem best! Being able to come up with something at a meet is incredible!

    Ok, my funny bone is twinging but I wasn't ready for a new post at my blog so this is just for you:

    Samurai Poppins loved to laugh but this tea party was bringing him down! He aimed and sang. A spoon full of sugar makes the katana go down! (139) ; )

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  14. Susan FobesJanuary 17, 2011 at 12:27 PM

    Motpg, you are too funny! I looked at this on my lunch break and laughed out loud-good thing I was alone! LOL!

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  15. PoochJanuary 17, 2011 at 1:56 PM

    Poor Fudo has a distinct disadvantage, doesn't he?! Your story made me laugh!
    :)

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  16. Liz MaysJanuary 17, 2011 at 2:03 PM

    You're so good at this! I like the father and son one the most!

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  17. moondustwriterJanuary 17, 2011 at 3:18 PM

    I think they are both great - who needs a rewrite? - you do great!!!

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  18. Susan FobesJanuary 17, 2011 at 7:12 PM

    Thanks moondustwritier and Peggy!

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  19. Susan FobesJanuary 17, 2011 at 7:14 PM

    Pooch, I'm glad I made you laugh, and blueviolet I love doing these! It really makes you think about making every word count...

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  20. Susan FobesJanuary 17, 2011 at 7:15 PM

    Pat, never underestimate the power of a good shock, huh? LOL!

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  21. AnonymousJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:35 PM

    very nice: I enjoyed it! and great poem too...

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  22. MargaretJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:36 PM

    Awe, so true. A parent and child fighting - is there every really a winner? Very insightful.

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  23. faithJanuary 17, 2011 at 10:17 PM

    Great job. I liked the poem.

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  24. AnonymousJanuary 17, 2011 at 11:22 PM

    Great poem!

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  25. AkelamaluJanuary 18, 2011 at 5:34 AM

    The parasol will be in tatters in no time!

    Great poem to go with the pic. :)

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  26. CadJanuary 18, 2011 at 7:56 AM

    War often produces that same effect...no one wins...

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  27. Grandma's GoulashJanuary 18, 2011 at 12:36 PM

    Good ones. If he's using that parasol for defense, I certainly hope that the ribs are made of steel!

    My MF: Details

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  28. kaykualaJanuary 18, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    Fudo has no choice, 'drowning man grabbing a straw' But he may have something up his sleeves, samurais do!

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  29. septembermomJanuary 19, 2011 at 5:45 PM

    The poem is terrific! I like both entries. No rewrites necessary. Hope you have a great week Susan!

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  30. AnonymousJanuary 21, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    A father-son fight never ends; and nobody wins this war.

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