Sunday, January 9, 2011

Mothman: winner or loser?


My son was intrigued with this week's picture for Microfiction Monday and was with me in the kitchen when I was trying to pen a story.  However, he didn't like the fact that my story might not end happily, so the two of us put our heads together to come up with a decidedly positive approach.

Here is our story (super hero style):
Mothman's steely grip was no match for Madam Blue's icy stare-she quickly reduced him to nothing more than a shiny pile of rubble. (130 characters)

And here is mine:

Mothman drew Sarah closer, tighter-she froze knowing his victims rarely survived, and that soon she would take the form of her captor. (134 characters)

As for poetry, after two "regular" entries, I'm spent, so I'm hoping that one of you took on the challenge.
If you are new to this meme, our host Susan, over at Stony River asks us to compose a 140 character story (including spacing and punctuation) about a picture she posts. So if you decide you are in the mood for a challenge, write your entry and link up at Stony River.  I can't wait to see what everyone has written!

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29 comments:

  1. Sylvia KJanuary 9, 2011 at 7:55 PM

    Hey, you guys did great! You'll have to collaborate more often! I love them both! Hope you've had a great weekend!

    Sylvia

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  2. JimJanuary 9, 2011 at 7:57 PM

    Excellent, Susan! I did miss your neat poem though. "Two heads are better than one" but not a very much with you guys.
    Best wishes to 'Son' and keep up with your writing, your mom is a good teacher! :)
    ..

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  3. PeggyJanuary 9, 2011 at 8:06 PM

    HAHAHAHAHA;
    Both stories are great. One turns into a shiny pile and the second gets to look like the mothman himself!
    OH my!

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  4. Michael G-GJanuary 9, 2011 at 8:36 PM

    Your son's quite the writer also! I really enjoyed both of yours. (I'll look forward to a poem next week--no pressure, mind you!)

    Have a great week.

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  5. SparkleFarkelJanuary 9, 2011 at 8:40 PM

    Both of these sound like great beginnings to fantastic comic books! (And after Mothman is reduced to a "rubble," no worries: he can change his first name to Barney and sidekick on a very successful History Channel documentary series about the Stone Age--> CLICK!)

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 9, 2011 at 9:24 PM

    I like them both! Maybe collaboration is the way to go...
    Cheers!

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  7. Maria@BubblegumandDuctTapeJanuary 9, 2011 at 9:57 PM

    ooooohhh I want to read more, it's like the scenes of a movie.... starring Angelina Jolie, lol. Very funny, loved them both. What a cutie, your son, he didn't want her to suffer.

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  8. erikJanuary 10, 2011 at 1:12 AM

    They are both great, but my favorite is the transformation-themed one.

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  9. moondustwriterJanuary 10, 2011 at 3:01 AM

    How fun - I love them both. A talented family!!!

    Moonie smiles

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  10. anthonynorthJanuary 10, 2011 at 3:47 AM

    Nicely done. Enjoyed them.

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  11. UnknownJanuary 10, 2011 at 5:57 AM

    Wow! Both are pretty darn amazing! Wonderful!

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  12. AnonymousJanuary 10, 2011 at 7:23 AM

    OOh excellent A+ :O)

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  13. izzyJanuary 10, 2011 at 8:11 AM

    Very creative! thanks-

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  14. hopeJanuary 10, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    Wonder why I liked the Superhero angle best? Hmmm...possibly the road I took. ;)

    They're both great and it's always a treat to get two for one on a Monday.

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  15. Bill ~ {The Old Fart}January 10, 2011 at 9:40 AM

    Both were great Susan, that Icy Stare, must be Power that Mere Mortals are not aware of.

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  16. Liz MaysJanuary 10, 2011 at 10:37 AM

    You guys are good at this! :)

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  17. yoncaJanuary 10, 2011 at 1:51 PM

    Yay to happy ends:)They both sound great to me.

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  18. TrellissimoJanuary 10, 2011 at 3:42 PM

    Shiny pile of rubble sounds good to me!

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  19. Maude LynnJanuary 10, 2011 at 4:00 PM

    Excellent! I like them both.

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  20. DianeJanuary 10, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    Both are great! I am all for the super hero/villians!!! :O)

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  21. KarenJanuary 11, 2011 at 12:11 AM

    Both approaches are great! As a Mama, I can very much appreciate the super hero approach. :> And both of them are very visual!

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  22. AnonymousJanuary 11, 2011 at 12:45 AM

    I like them both. I wrote my first one.

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  23. YarnladyJanuary 11, 2011 at 7:17 AM

    My comment got misplaced? Both are great! I think you son should join the fun!

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  24. kaykualaJanuary 11, 2011 at 8:28 AM

    Both are great! Very realistic and clearly expressed

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  25. Grandma's GoulashJanuary 11, 2011 at 1:17 PM

    That one gave me the chills! Nice job.

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  26. septembermomJanuary 14, 2011 at 4:43 PM

    Hey Susan, great job on both of these. I love how you brought me right into the action in these short lines. Congratulations on another win at Write With Pictures! Here's the link:

    http://writewithpictures.blogspot.com/2011/01/thursdays-haiku.html

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  27. PatJanuary 16, 2011 at 9:12 AM

    Ooh, two great stories, Susan! I like them both, though my favorite is the first one-- unique feminine power!

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  28. Clueless_MamaJanuary 16, 2011 at 11:49 PM

    I think you both did a great job. That would be hard to come up with. You can't say much in 140 characters. Nice job:)

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  29. MIGJanuary 21, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    I like both stories! This is a very intriguing photo.

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