Sunday, January 9, 2011

Mothman: winner or loser?


My son was intrigued with this week's picture for Microfiction Monday and was with me in the kitchen when I was trying to pen a story.  However, he didn't like the fact that my story might not end happily, so the two of us put our heads together to come up with a decidedly positive approach.

Here is our story (super hero style):
Mothman's steely grip was no match for Madam Blue's icy stare-she quickly reduced him to nothing more than a shiny pile of rubble. (130 characters)

And here is mine:

Mothman drew Sarah closer, tighter-she froze knowing his victims rarely survived, and that soon she would take the form of her captor. (134 characters)

As for poetry, after two "regular" entries, I'm spent, so I'm hoping that one of you took on the challenge.
If you are new to this meme, our host Susan, over at Stony River asks us to compose a 140 character story (including spacing and punctuation) about a picture she posts. So if you decide you are in the mood for a challenge, write your entry and link up at Stony River.  I can't wait to see what everyone has written!

29 comments:

  1. Hey, you guys did great! You'll have to collaborate more often! I love them both! Hope you've had a great weekend!

    Sylvia

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  2. Excellent, Susan! I did miss your neat poem though. "Two heads are better than one" but not a very much with you guys.
    Best wishes to 'Son' and keep up with your writing, your mom is a good teacher! :)
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  3. HAHAHAHAHA;
    Both stories are great. One turns into a shiny pile and the second gets to look like the mothman himself!
    OH my!

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  4. Your son's quite the writer also! I really enjoyed both of yours. (I'll look forward to a poem next week--no pressure, mind you!)

    Have a great week.

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  5. Both of these sound like great beginnings to fantastic comic books! (And after Mothman is reduced to a "rubble," no worries: he can change his first name to Barney and sidekick on a very successful History Channel documentary series about the Stone Age--> CLICK!)

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  6. I like them both! Maybe collaboration is the way to go...
    Cheers!

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  7. ooooohhh I want to read more, it's like the scenes of a movie.... starring Angelina Jolie, lol. Very funny, loved them both. What a cutie, your son, he didn't want her to suffer.

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  8. They are both great, but my favorite is the transformation-themed one.

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  9. How fun - I love them both. A talented family!!!

    Moonie smiles

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  10. Wow! Both are pretty darn amazing! Wonderful!

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  11. Wonder why I liked the Superhero angle best? Hmmm...possibly the road I took. ;)

    They're both great and it's always a treat to get two for one on a Monday.

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  12. Both were great Susan, that Icy Stare, must be Power that Mere Mortals are not aware of.

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  13. Yay to happy ends:)They both sound great to me.

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  14. Shiny pile of rubble sounds good to me!

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  15. Both are great! I am all for the super hero/villians!!! :O)

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  16. Both approaches are great! As a Mama, I can very much appreciate the super hero approach. :> And both of them are very visual!

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  17. I like them both. I wrote my first one.

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  18. My comment got misplaced? Both are great! I think you son should join the fun!

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  19. Both are great! Very realistic and clearly expressed

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  20. That one gave me the chills! Nice job.

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  21. Hey Susan, great job on both of these. I love how you brought me right into the action in these short lines. Congratulations on another win at Write With Pictures! Here's the link:

    http://writewithpictures.blogspot.com/2011/01/thursdays-haiku.html

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  22. Ooh, two great stories, Susan! I like them both, though my favorite is the first one-- unique feminine power!

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  23. I think you both did a great job. That would be hard to come up with. You can't say much in 140 characters. Nice job:)

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  24. I like both stories! This is a very intriguing photo.

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