Sunday, February 6, 2011

It's that time!

I thought I would kill a little time and do number 69, Microfiction Monday that is. Once again Susan, over at Stony River has posted a picture and dared us to write a story in 140 characters (including spaces and punctuation)or less. I was able to put together a prose piece pretty easily, but my mind was resisting any attempts at poetry as long as the game was still on. Alas, the Steelers lost, and I was able to come back and write one. Here is this week's picture and my first story:


Ann was shaking as she looked at the old clock-he was to meet her in 15 minutes, but could he give up everything so they could be together?(140 characters)

And here is my poem:
The stately building covered in grime
Sighed as the old, iron clock chimed
I was rather grand in my prime
If only I knew a way to stop time (140 characters)

I know at least one Steeler player who probably wishes he could turn back time when his team was only down by three! I think I need some Rolaids...   (I'll hop by everyone's blogs tomorrow.)


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  1. AnonymousFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:36 PM

    Enjoyed them both. The poem was my favorite - who hasn't wanted to stop time? :)

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  2. Sylvia KFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:36 PM

    Terrific story and poem! I really love them both, they're excellent! And I do hope you found the Rolaids!!! That Steeler player could probably use some, too!! Hope you have a great week, Susan! Thanks as always for your visit/comment! Much appreciated!

    Sylvia

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  3. Elizabeth MuellerFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:40 PM

    As always, your poetry amaze me! Have a fabulous week!

    ♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    Your first entry was much what I was going to write, but the more I looked at that photo, the more my OCD kicked up.

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  5. PatFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:55 PM

    Oh, wow, both great stories, Susan. I especially like the poem with all its "-ime" rhymes and melancholy yearning.

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  6. PeggyFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:00 PM

    Susan

    I hope he comes and meets Ann.
    I believe he did!
    Lovely poem, I really love to read them!

    I'm a Bear fan and it was like drinking vinigar to root for Green Bay. (I went to college there)

    Better luck next year Susan for both of us!

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  7. JimFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:52 PM

    Nice rhyme, Susan. :)
    My team is the Houston Texans but tonight it was the Packers. Neither team seemed in their prime to me.
    ..

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  8. Rinkly RimesFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:22 AM

    Fancy trusting a married man!

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  9. indicaspeciesFebruary 7, 2011 at 6:02 AM

    Oh, good ones, both.
    Have a lovely day.

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  10. DianeFebruary 7, 2011 at 7:28 AM

    Amen! I am all for the stopping time thing... :O)

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  11. izzyFebruary 7, 2011 at 8:38 AM

    Ooooh that is a tension ratchet! and love the rhyme one too,Thanks.

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  12. Liz MaysFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:59 AM

    I especially love your poem!

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  13. annies homeFebruary 7, 2011 at 12:56 PM

    love both the scenario of the story and your poem

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  14. septembermomFebruary 7, 2011 at 1:26 PM

    Love the romance of the first one and the perspective of the second one. Both are great Susan!

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  15. Grandma's GoulashFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:11 PM

    Please let me know if you find a way to stop time. Even better, a way to turn it back. LOL

    Enjoyed both your takes on the image.

    My MM: Truth In Advertising

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  16. AnyesFebruary 7, 2011 at 6:53 PM

    Great entries, I love both of them with a bit of preference for the romantic one though ;-)

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  17. Michael G-GFebruary 7, 2011 at 7:03 PM

    Both of these are great.

    Hope you've recovered from yesterday's loss!
    Have a great week, Susan.

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  18. ruthiFebruary 7, 2011 at 8:06 PM

    awww... everything for the name of love.

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  19. Melanie ShermanFebruary 7, 2011 at 11:35 PM

    Love the poem, but the other one made me hold my breath, waiting.

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  20. anthonynorthFebruary 8, 2011 at 2:39 AM

    Enjoyed both - especially the poem. If we COULD stop time.

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  21. RekhaFebruary 8, 2011 at 3:15 AM

    The poetry is heartfelt and so true...everything ages...
    Whether he meets her or not is something for the next MF.
    Loved both...

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  22. DianneFebruary 8, 2011 at 9:06 AM

    the poem is especially lovely
    it gives a quality of humanity to a grand old structure

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  23. KarenFebruary 8, 2011 at 9:58 AM

    Oh don't we wish we could stop those hands of time, maybe at least be able to pause them for a bit, here and there! :> Two great microfictions! :>

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  24. MargaretFebruary 8, 2011 at 12:30 PM

    Love the poem - you succeeded brilliantly with both.

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  25. DeboraFebruary 8, 2011 at 8:57 PM

    I'm just so impressed with both pieces. Just wonderful

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  26. MariaFebruary 9, 2011 at 3:39 AM

    Two great stories. Well done.

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  27. yoncaFebruary 9, 2011 at 12:35 PM

    Oh,I want to stop time so badly!!! Love the poem, Susan! xo

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  28. AnonymousFebruary 10, 2011 at 10:50 AM

    Yes they're both very good. The 1st one was gripping :O)

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