Thursday, March 17, 2011

Focusing on Book Blurb Friday

I am now looking forward to Book Blurb Friday as I once looked forward to Microfiction Monday. If your new, Lisa Ricard Claro over at Writing in the Buff posts a picture and asks that you write a 150 word (or less) book blurb.  It's tremendously challenging and great fun.  Just head over there to link up, and then stay awhile to read some of the other entries.

I had a hard time with the 150 word limit tonight-I just had so much to say, so I started hacking away at some of the needless adjectives until I got it down to 150 exactly. Here is this week's picture and my story:


Out of Focus

Andie spent her whole life trying to please. An only child, she struggled to be everything her parents hoped she would be, but never quite lived up to their expectations-until she married Bill Peterson, a promising young politician. Andie’s parents loved Bill, and with their urging, and Bill’s perseverance, Andie decided she loved him too.

But after their much-publicized wedding and his election to the senate, Bill was no longer the gentle soul his adoring public witnessed; he became obsessed, convinced that his wife would leave him and end his political career.

He began to monitor Andie’s calls, track her whereabouts, and soon prohibited anyone from visiting the house without his approval.

Andie wanted out and finally broke the news to Bill during an anniversary dinner, but after she took a few bites, things became fuzzy, out of focus, and she heard a quiet voice saying, "You’ll never leave me."
(150 words)

Everyone saw something different with last week's picture, so I can't wait to read the other entries!




16 comments:

  1. Hi Susan, that is great story and leaves me wondering what happens next!

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  2. You wrote another best seller! This has the best creepy undertones ever, and I'd sure like to see how Andie bests the evil Bill. Sounds like a terrific psychological thriller.

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  3. That blurb makes me want to read more. Nice job. I can never be wordy enough to hit 100 much less 150... and well, it shows! LOL.

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  4. Susan,
    This is very creepy good! I want to know what happens to Andie and that psycho husband of hers so keep it going! Good one!



    ~Jean

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  5. I enjoyed this. Very sinister. I can see a movie deal, too!

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  6. I was gripped by this and would definately buy the book based on your blurb! Excellent!

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  7. Oh, no. Poor Andie. What will happen to her and how will she beat him? I want to know more, please!

    Book Blurb Friday

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  8. Goodness, poor Andie! Is she destined to end up a prisoner in her own home - or murdered? Shivery exciting stuff:-)

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  9. I loved this - It's a great hook, and makes me want to read the book.

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  10. Very chilling and tantalizing at the same time! I want to read this book!

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  11. Hi Susan, Well done! You have a talent for mysteries. I'm happily joining in the fun this week too. Hope all is well. I'll talk to you soon :)

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  12. oh wow. That was really good. I just found this meme through June Freaking Cleaver and I had to give it a try too. I'm hooked.

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  13. I knew Bill was a "baddie." I would enjoy reading it. It kind of reminds me of the movie "Enough" with Jennifer Lopez. If you have not seen it, you might check it out. It could serve as research for writing this book...

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  14. what a tease!!! You need to keep going with this one : )

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