Monday, July 25, 2011

Just one of those days (and Succinctly Yours!)

I am a not feeling very well, and the heat made everything worse. I put off doing laundry until today because of spotty rain showers the past couple days, and I wanted to hang the clothes outside to be a little more power conscious. But while I saved electrical consumption, I put out a great deal of physical energy consumption, and each trip oustide left me drenched in sweat. What was I thinking? I was going to review some movies in this post, but I needed to whine more...

Thank goodness for Succinctly Yours, another writing meme that piggy backs on the idea of Susan of the Stony River Blog.
Grandma Goulash posts a picture and you are to write a 140 character or word story about it. You can also use the word of the day in your post if you wish. This week's word is arbitrary. Here is the picture and two takes this week (one poetry and one prose):

Dad went for a Coke and I glanced at all the old tools. He was like his tools in a way-a bit worn, but still a force to be reckoned with.  (138 characters)

I ran my hand along the bench,
Wood shavings cascade to the floor,
This room's a silent tribute,
To the man who is no more. (132 characters)

I sort of fell into the poem while trying to cut down another piece, but I still didn't get everything I wanted out of it so I tried again and it took me longer than it should have to do two. I will come around soon!


  1. Some great thoughts on the photo! Sorry to hear you are struggling with the heat! I am immersing myself in writing because it is so windy and rainy and cold in Melbourne!

  2. Your micros were beautifully done. Hope you're feeling better soon.

  3. Loved both of these, Susan. They evoke a lot of emotion. Well done.

    Hope you feel better!

  4. Both are so touching and beautifully expressed.
    Hope you are soon feeling better. When does school start for you? It's August 17 here, so even though I am retired, my heart is there in the classroom.

    Be well.

  5. These are both great, Susan! I like the comparison of Dad with his old tools--very fitting. The poem is clever and creative, too.

    You can always make your SY entry longer by counting words rather than characters, as Grandma's rules include the use of up to 140 words if you choose. It's definitely more of a challenge to keep to 140 characters or fewer though!

  6. Those are both lovely. The poetry was particularly touching. Sorry that you haven't been feeling well. Hope things are looking up soon.

  7. Both are very nice! Each expresses a sentiment about the man.

  8. The one about running your hand over the bench...loved it!

  9. Gone but not forgotten - that's nice. :)

  10. These are excellent pieces, Susan! And I can sympathize with your current lack of energy.I'm in the same boat, though thank goodness I don't have sweltering heat to contend with. Then, I'd be truly useless...LOL!

  11. These are great. I loved the second one!

    Hope you're feeling better Susan :) Hugs!

  12. I hope you've been feeling better! I really like that photo and what you wrote. I like how you called the room a silent tribute. You never disappoint me in your writing!


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