So, even though I detest the whole process (lathering the kids down with sunscreen, packing all the necessities for the pool, piling in the car, arriving at the pool, getting abused by kids in said pool, coming back home, then dealing with all the wet necessities and showers), this is exactly what we have been doing almost five days straight. We took only one day off to do grocery shopping and errands... Are things as hot your way?
Oh well-summer goes by quickly so I better not complain. I'm just glad it's
Aubrey began working on her family tree when she was in grade school, but after her parent’s sudden disappearance when she was 12, her once passing interest became a serious pursuit. Some thought it a bit strange for a young girl to be digging about in the past, trying to locate estranged family members. Authorities believed her parents were dead, but Aubrey believed differently, thinking that somebody knew something.
The largest piece of the puzzle came to Aubrey in the form of a note that read, “The girl will tell you,” and it lead straight to Shady Oaks Cemetery. Friends warned it was a cruel joke, but Aubrey went looking for the “girl” anyway.
She now stood facing a statue resembling her in every way, and as she stared, a tear slowly rolled down the marble face, and a voice in Aubrey's head started to speak… (146 words)
As usual, I don't like my title very much. Do the rest of you struggle with your titles too? I can't wait to see what everyone wrote!
Similarly propelled to mine but I'd think two very different stories Susan - and as for titles I sometimes look in a dictionary of quotations - 'stone' brought nothing but 'marble' did, although I subsequently played around with it, and once I had the title I had the story ...
ReplyDeleteA crying statue! Intriguing. I want to know the rest.
ReplyDeleteFirst the blurb had me filled with suspense .... I can't wait to find out just how she finds out where her parents are---oh and tears will flow from this old codger too [me], I'm sure.
ReplyDeleteHot? Ha....it's been triple digit heat index here for weeks! And no rain! But we have the beach...sad tho, we don't go there----why? 'Cause it's too hot to be outdoors and suffer from heat stroke.
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Have a super duper weekend.
Well you got me hooked, what a great book blurb. Stopping in to say, "Hi." Hope you're doing well.
ReplyDeleteOooh! Love that creepy-yet-somehow-sweet premise of the girl searching for her roots and finding herself in a cemetery! I always have a hard time deciding on titles, too. And yep, 100s here as well. I'm trying to stay inside. Even pool water feels like warm soup. Bleah!
ReplyDeleteHi Susan, wow! That is really a good story; it has so much mystery and really catches my attention. With so many doing their family histories these days, and the statue looking just like Aubrey, it would be a sure fire bestseller.
ReplyDeleteI usually do okay with the titles, but not always the endings ... I ran out of words this week, but gave the idea that if Ariel knocks over a precious statue, she would be in trouble.
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I like the way you've set the story up and I'm dying to know "What The Statue Told Her". I think the title works quite well, although I also find myself struggling with those.
ReplyDeleteWhen Steven King wrote The Shining, he titled it The Hotel Story. He claims that authors shouldn't worry about titles, because publishers have folks who come up with those. Since there haven't been any publishers beating down my door, I'm still coming up with my own. lol
Sorry your burning up. We are, too. We had a few cooler days last week (in the high 80s) but we're back into the mid 90s again today. Ugh. And humid!
ReplyDeleteThis photo seems to evoke supernatural vibes...my own blurb has that element, as well as the others I've read already. This has a different twist with the statue looking like the MC, the mystery regarding the death of the parents, and then the "voice." So many different ways you might go with this, Susan. Nice! I'd read it...I want to find out if she's really hearing a voice, or if she's mentally unbalanced. Either way, cool story.
Sounds like great read!Family history always reveals much!!!
ReplyDeleteHow mysterious and intriguing, I would love to read the whole story. ~ Calico Contemplations
ReplyDeleteHi Susan, I like the sound of this story.
ReplyDeleteRe; Titles. How about Stony Silence ?
Have you seen this help pdf on titles: http://www.mslexia.co.uk/getpublished/pub_wkshop1.php
BTW if you'd like to cool down come over to the UK we've got rain, wind and rain every week with a few warm dry days scattered in between. :O)
ReplyDeleteI like your blub very much. That picture reminds me of Midnight in the Garden of Good and Evil, so I can't get past that to think of another. And yes, it is crazy hot here too. It needs to end soon! Thunder storms are on the way . . .
ReplyDeleteSusan--I agree. The titles are tough. Since we only have 150 words to draw from, it's hard to get something that really resonates for a title. (My title was really lame!)
ReplyDeleteI like the tear and the voice happening simultaneously.
Oh the tear rolling down the face really got me. You are so good at these Susan. I look forward to reading your entries each week.
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